Attempt 4* =)

christina · Post by **christina** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 10:32 pm

Kinda looked at HOLLAstir, sorry if i copied it to much...
Rate it plz^^
Tell me what i can fix too.
v1:

v2:

v3:

kate4231 · Post by **kate4231** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 10:37 pm

not bad jus too much white for me

HOLLAstir · Post by **HOLLAstir** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 10:38 pm

You're here to learn. Take things from other artists style you like then create your own style that's what it's all about! It seems "empty" even though there appears to be a lot going on. The render seems a little small you may want to make him a little bigger. I like the colors you used and the smudging is good. The line brushing I don't like the placement of them so much. Try incoorporating a c4d in there or re-arrange your brushing to make it flow a little better. Change the font of the text as well, but the placement is fine. Other then that I like it <3

christina · Post by **christina** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 10:42 pm

do you have a site for c4ds?

HOLLAstir · Post by **HOLLAstir** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 10:48 pm

http://planetrenders.net/renders/thumbnails.php?album=1

Edit: On page 4 of that link there is a brown one. Its on the top row third one from the left. You can mess with blending options to darken it if needed <3 And a tanish one on page 8

christina · Post by **christina** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 10:57 pm

Well heres v2 =)
Kinda just took out 1 strip and changed one around, made him bigger, changed text, tell me what you think. Tell me if it looks better than the 1st one. I think the text looks bad

HOLLAstir · Post by **HOLLAstir** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 11:04 pm

I would even make him a bit bigger. You can see the difference of how he looks in v1 and v2. You'll start to see what size looks better the others. Keep the text somewhat simple. Use something like Vrinda, something more on the "simpler" side. Personally I would take out that other brushing on the left as well as the right and use something else. Have it going more up towards the corner then to the side. Also he looks a tad blurry. I'd go to Filter-->Sharpen-->Sharpen one time or two get him looking a little more "crisp." Your on the right track keep practicing! <3 These are just suggestions just go with whatever you like and whatever your style is <3

christina · Post by **christina** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 11:09 pm

I dont know, i dont like "simple" texts to much.

HOLLAstir · Post by **HOLLAstir** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 11:12 pm

Sometimes simple is better. But if your going to go for something less simple. Find a font that flows well with the sig.

christina · Post by **christina** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 11:13 pm

i dont get the "flow" thing

HOLLAstir · Post by **HOLLAstir** » Tue Dec 11, 2007 11:27 pm

Now the text here "flows." It's easy on the eye and it's not the main focal point it just gradually goes with the sig as a whole.

The text here doesn't "Flow." It's not very appealing to the eye and it's more of a distraction rather then it being easy on the eye and flowing nicely with the sig.

Not the best example because I know my text isn't the greatest example. But do you get a general idea?

christina · Post by **christina** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 12:10 am

thanks i get it kinda =)
Just cant really find flowing texts

HOLLAstir · Post by **HOLLAstir** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 12:17 am

christina wrote:thanks i get it kinda =)
Just cant really find flowing texts

http://www.dafont.com you should find something that will work there.

christina · Post by **christina** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 12:21 am

Ya, look at this, better text?

HOLLAstir · Post by **HOLLAstir** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 12:37 am

Personally the "T-Pain" doesn't look good. But "Christy" looks good. Nice playboy bunny logo lol.

christina · Post by **christina** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 12:46 am

thought i would try something like that ^^
And ya for some reason the t-pain dosent look good.

christina · Post by **christina** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 12:53 am

Final one i think, had to kinda take the i and add it in with the "a" and "p" to make it look better.
Here it is

HOLLAstir · Post by **HOLLAstir** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 12:55 am

Don't know if you got my PM or not. But it looks better! <3

christina · Post by **christina** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 12:56 am

do you have msn, the only thing i got ^^

aazumak · Post by **aazumak** » Wed Dec 12, 2007 2:20 am

text isnt bad

the left side is good imo

the right side is kinda just smudged and not much to it

i feel liek you could have added another couple layers of complexity to it to make it abit more.

the three golden lines on teh left side r good though i like those, just eed something else on the right

edit but i do like it