My thesis structures generally consist of a 'Guess what? Prove it! So what?'
Here's an example of one of my thesis's.
Thesis:
Michael Moore the director of Bowling for Columbine exploits the discourse of the culture of fear and blame in order to position the audience to accept his opinion that America is in dire need for gun control.
Expansion
Inevitable this culture of fear and blame is largely supported through the sociocultural perspectives of Americans and their way of life. Moore successfully exploits the attitudes of the American people, highlighting the need for change plus a social desire to do so.
Thesis:
Todays youth are far wiser than their predecessors.
Expansion
[i]Youth culture is recognised by 21st Century society as a forbidding, uncontrollable wasteland of technology, rights aware, rude, materialists. However, perhaps the persuasiveness and attractiveness of this ideology stems from the increasingly obvious under current of the 'wise aged' no longer being able to control youth through traditional means.
So with your thesis, you need to write something similar I'd guess?
Guess what?Youths are joining gangs (Or something you've noticed)
Prove it!Briefly prove it. Without evidence as evidence is to be used in the body.
Prove it!They're doing it for [list reasons]
As far as I'm aware, it's ok to give reasons in a thesis, however you don't explain them. The thesis is the most important part of any essay. It's really just a broad outline of what your essay is going to be about.
It's hard for someone who doesn't know the specifics of what you're doing to write you a thesis.
Is it about a movie?
What's your evidence to prove it throughout the body?
etc.
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