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Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:36 am**

this is paper i did for school

towards ends i got little tired so it turns into BS

what you think?

Ni**er, Spic, Chink, Gook, Jew, and Cracker are all different racial slurs used in today’s society even though it is unethical. Racism in the United States began with Native Americans, spread to African American’s as slaves and recently to Arab’s as terrorists. Although minority groups are usually at the end of racial discrimination, sometimes they themselves are the ones being racist, blaming majority groups for their despair. Instead of proving the stereotype wrong, they relate back to old habits, and end up in bad positions. It has got to a point where they use it as an excuse for their dismay.
   As defined by the Compact Oxford English dictionary, racism is “discrimination against or antagonism towards other races.” Racism is derived through stubborn beliefs and years of ignorance. These years of ignorance have caused many people to see themselves as superior to other individuals around them because they are of the better race. This superior idea was most evident back in the colonial times when rich white folk had black slaves. They brought the black people over from Africa and forced them to pay off their debts with labor. However, these black people never could pay off their debts, so they stayed slaves their whole life. As colonial times passed and more territories join the United States, the blacks started to rebel. It wasn’t until later, during the civil rights movement, they fought to be treated as equals. Society had always treated them as a lesser group and thought that they didn’t deserve the same rights that white people had.
   For many years after they gained their rights, they still weren’t treated as equals. Businesses and society would still see them as racially unequal even though the Constitution said they were equal like everyone else. These racist times were when the black community started to see the white people as the enemy. They started to blame white people for their state of living. Saying that they couldn’t get a job because they were black, or they couldn’t live in a nice neighborhood because they were black, and at the time it was ok because it was the truth. In contrast, today racism is not as bad as it used to be and the black community has the same opportunities as everyone else. However there are still some black people who have not progressed very far in life and blame the white community for their hindrance. This is just wrong. They don’t have the determination to try to make their own life better. They don’t have the drive to change the stereotype of a black American, but they just blame the white people, seeing as it was their fault before.
   This is where racism becomes an excuse instead of ignorance. People are afraid to be labeled as a racist, so they try to deal with the problem themselves. Today companies have a quota of the different amount of minority groups that they have to employ. If not for this quota, some people might call them racist because they don’t hire any black people, or Hispanic people, or women. They might not hire not because they are racist, but simply because they just don’t fit the job requirements. In an article by Kevin Mooney, he noted that Deneen Moore, a fellow of Project 21, a black conservative group, said “bogus allegations of racism are often used as an excuse by some to ‘work less hard’ and fall back into a ‘victimization mentality’.” Obviously the real victim is society for falling into this ruse. 
   Although some people are using racism as an excuse, others are actually being affected by racism. However, blacks’ and whites’ views of these actual racist problems vary. According to a poll done by Opinion Research Corp. for CNN, when asked whether racism was a very serious problem, 49 percent of blacks agreed while only 18 percent of whites did. When they were asked if they knew someone they considered racist, 48 percent of blacks and 43 percent of whites said yes. But, when asked if they considered themselves racist, only 12 percent of black and 13 percent of whites agreed. This shows how one-sided racism is. It is has become to favor the minority groups, but according to Mychal Massie, a chairman Project 21, “To consider only whites are racist is wrong,” Now minority groups are not the only ones on the unethical end of racism. 
      Ni**er, Spic, Chink, Gook, Jew, and Cracker are all still racial slurs used throughout the United States. Racism is still a serious problem in America, affecting both minorities and majorities. It may have diminished over the years, but it will never actually be eliminated. At the very least, we should limit our use of racism—for both sides of society.

yes i actually wrote the word N-I-(gee)-(gee)-E-R

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:42 am**

what grade r u in?

but take out that first sentence of ur conclusion, it's unnecessary.

EDIT: and the first sentence of ur intro, forgot about that.

u don't need to use those slurs.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:44 am**

i have to write a paper on racism too!!

Thanks..

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:51 am**

redneck wrote:i have to write a paper on racism too!!

Thanks..

lol xD

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:53 am**

TOloseGT wrote:what grade r u in?

but take out that first sentence of ur conclusion, it's unnecessary.

EDIT: and the first sentence of ur intro, forgot about that.

u don't need to use those slurs.

I think the slurs are okay, because it's a paper on a major subject; racism and you can't just say "Name calling towards different ethnic groups is bad" or something. Harsh to list them since I hate even hearing them but it's okay IMO. Not as your hook though. Re-arrange the paragraph a little?

Also..
When you list a.. people.. Dunno if that's how to describe it.. It's not possessive.

...spread to African American’s as slaves and recently to Arab’s as terrorists...

It should be African Americans, and Arabs.
Small grammar mistakes such as that irritate me

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:55 am**

Paragraph of a paper?

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:56 am**

I'd give it a C. There's a lot of grammatical errors, the structure isn't defined very well, and the paper contradicts itself in several places. Additionally, the use of racial slurs as an attention getter wasn't necessary and seems amateurish.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:56 am**

i like your essay id give you a 94 cause its basically what i wouldve written [including the part where you bsed]. one question though your school doesnt get squemish about racial slurs.

BUT
what class is it written for? english I or english II+ or ap something+
if its english I hold that 94
english II+ you get a 76
ap something you fail... [damn fake college courses]
although i would have to see a rubric.
cause its all about the rubric for all i know this may be the bare minimum you need to pass, or it might be exactly what your teacher is looking for

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are you sure you can use the term ni-gger on a school paper. then again teachers and principle are very careful about who they punish and dont.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:58 am**

the slurs are unnecessary imo

i know he's trying to bring in the reader, but u dun need to use slurs for that. list a bunch of events that happened in the last 20-30 yrs that was racist. like a few months ago, the Jena 6 thing, and the noose that was hung outside an african-american prof's door.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 1:04 am**

After reading it carefully:

I would give you an F. Assumptions, generalizations, inappropriate conclusions, and a lack of professionalism are things you want to avoid when writing a paper (or in this case, paragraph)

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 1:06 am**

imp3r10 wrote:

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As defined by the Compact Oxford English dictionary, racism is “discrimination against or antagonism towards other races.”

On top of what other people said, I would remove this if I were you. Using a "definition" in your essay makes it seem extremely amateur. Restate it in your own words if you really need to include the definition - I highly doubt people, especially the person who's grading your paper, doesn't know what racism is.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 1:06 am**

dom wrote:After reading it carefully:

I would give you an F. Assumptions, generalizations, inappropriate conclusions, and a lack of professionalism are things you want to avoid when writing a paper (or in this case, paragraph)

6 paragraphs... also at dude writing the paper, unless there is a 6 paragraph requierment, and unless your pressed on time... basic 5 paragraph format nvr hurts.

english I and II = basic 5 paragraphs... anything higher than I or II = well anything that will get your point across [at least 3 maybe 2]

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 1:11 am**

racism as a whole was prolly his intent, but his essay was about african-american racism.

EDIT: another reason why using those slurs is unnecessary. he has slurs for a bunch of minorities, but only talks about african-americans.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 1:13 am**

Yeah never mind, I just saw the title.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 1:51 am**

Do a little research on racism for the other terms you defined. A paragraph for each of the slurs mentioned would be good, as long as you provide real-world examples of racial intolerance or bigotry, not just your opinions on it. Also, you use the word 'They' a lot. They who?

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:03 am**

I would ask you to do a little bit more research on Racism. I would give it a C+ though good job. If this was a discussion about your report I would have to disagree with some your statements.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:15 am**

The grade would be based on what grade he's in.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:15 am**

Your essay is extremely bias. While you attempt to express (very poorly imo) to express the resentment that the black community has for the white community you completely ignore the underlying racism that is embedded in American society. The Jena 6 Incident is a great example of how real and strong racist feelings and behavior are in the United States and how its so much a part of life it largely goes unnoticed.

In a society like ours things like Affirmative Action are necessary to give other ppl a chance sometimes. Think about it, most ppl are more comfortable around ppl who think and act like them. Now if a White business owner is handed 2 resumes with equal credentials one from a white man and one from a black man from a social stand point which one is he more likely to choose. Im guessing the White one because thats just how ppl are they like to be comfortable. The problem with this is that most if not all the major companies in the US are white owned so even if you are AS good as a white contender if your a minority your more likely to get ignored in favor of the white person.

In my family (im black if you haven't figured that out by now) education is stressed as the most important thing. Not just in my immediate family either but all my cousins on both sides of my family treat education as the highest priority and make it very clear from an early age

1. White ppl run this country.
2. Statistically when i turn 18 i should've been in jail already
3. It will never be enough to be AS good as anyone else i MUST always be BETTER because the cards are stacked against me from the start.
4. Education is the ONLY way to escape from the work class.

I don't know what black america your essay is looking at but it sounds like your looking at it selectively and don't really know anything about Black America at all. I know alot of ppl who struggle to work 2 jobs and either take care of kids or try to go to school. My sister being one of them attends Loyola College in Maryland half tuition paid by scholarship and she works 2 jobs to pay for the rest while juggling Six classes. Its really easy to look at the worst aspect of a race and use them as examples for the rest of us but bottom line is that isn't the truth.

The truth is we are a minority, we only make up 12% of the population (blacks at least) and its struggle because its not like the US has been spoon feeding us good jobs and the best education available for the last 50 years thanks to crack, increase in guns, lack of funding for education in minority heavy areas, and welfare the US gov't have all but crippled African-American society. and yes i blame all that stuff on the gov't and no i don't yell that when i go in for a job interview. I could go into more things that US has done to the black population if you want (Tuskegee) but bottom line is the most of know the gov't is out to get us and what doesn't kill us makes us stronger not some pu**y little victims.

btw your essay is a paragraph like dom said and bravo on quoting the black conservative group....there the ppl thats most in touch with the black community :roll:

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:21 am**

I'd give you a F+ since you did try write something longer than a paragraph.

Big points
*No sexi paragraphs
*90% of the times when you use racial slurs it repels the reader rather than attract.
*Ambiguity of what you are trying to say as a whole.
*Grammar mistakes, but since I assume you are writing this for humanities the teacher won't take a lot off.
“discrimination against or antagonism towards other races.” and *****, gook, chink don't fit together.
*The definition doesn't fit with rest of your writing.
*Generally that essay just shows me what your opinions of black people are, generally I'd say to teachers they couldn't care less what a high school boys has to say.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:27 am**

I love it when people put their paragraphs on SRF, especially the last one.

"Liquid water, or H2O..."

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:27 am**

XemnasXD wrote:Your essay is extremely bias. While you attempt to express (very poorly imo) to express the resentment that the black community has for the white community you completely ignore the underlying racism that is embedded in American society. The Jena 6 Incident is a great example of how real and strong racist feelings and behavior are in the United States and how its so much a part of life it largely goes unnoticed.

In a society like ours things like Affirmative Action are necessary to give other ppl a chance sometimes. Think about it, most ppl are more comfortable around ppl who think and act like them. Now if a White business owner is handed 2 resumes with equal credentials one from a white man and one from a black man from a social stand point which one is he more likely to choose. Im guessing the White one because thats just how ppl are they like to be comfortable. The problem with this is that most if nor all the major companies in the US are white owned so even if you are AS good as a white contender if your a minority your more likely to get ignored in favor of the white person.

In my family (im black if you haven't figured that out by now) education is stressed as the most important thing. Not just in my immediat family either but all my cousins on both sides of my family treat education as the highest priority and make it very clear from an early age

1. White ppl run this country.
2. Statistically when i turn 18 i should've been in jail already
3. It will never be enough to be AS good as anyone else i MUST always be BETTER because the cards are stacked against me from the start.
4. Education is the ONLY way to escape from the work class.

I don't know what black america your essay is looking at but it sounds like your looking at it selectively and don't really know anything about Black America at all. I know alot of ppl who struggle to work 2 jobs and either take care of kids or try to go to school. My sister being one of them attends Loyola College in Maryland half tuition paid by scholarship and she works 2 jobs to pay for the rest while juggling Six classes. Its really easy to look at the worst aspect of a race and use them as examples for the rest of us but bottom line is that isn't the truth.

The truth is we are a minority, we only make up 12% of the population (blacks at least) and its struggle because its not like the US has been spoon feeding us good jobs and the best education available for the last 50 years thanks to crack, increase in guns, lack of funding for education in minority heavy areas, and welfare the US gov't have all but crippled African-American society. and yes i blame all that stuff on the gov't and no i don't yell that when i go in for a job interview. I could go into more things that US has done to the black population if you want (Tuskegee) but bottom line is the most of know the gov't is out to get us and what doesn't kill us makes us stronger not some pu**y little victims.

btw your essay is a paragraph like dom said and bravo on quoting the black conservative group....there the ppl thats most in touch with the black community

well said, although whites wont be the majority for long, by 2050 the majority will be hispanics.

XD shadow your talking about my 10th grade term paper, damn that was a whole lot of BULLSHIT, im surprised my teacher couldnt smell it a mile away. i love normal classes teachers are so easy with thier grading i didnt even have 2 try, bullshit half misinform the other half, then get a good grade cause the teacher was ignorant whoo. now im in ap and i actually have to hustle cause it takes the teacher longer than a day to grade like 200 term papers. hilarious whoo cant wait for my senior year Ap european lit, ima be chilling with shakespeare and his gayass

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:33 am**

Barotix wrote:well said, although whites wont be the majority for long, by 2050 the majority will be hispanics.

Yeah they sure will be, theres only 1.3 billion Chinese guys out there.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:35 am**

Whatever you do, don't forget white people aren't the only people capable of being racist.

I also think no matter how you write a paper about racism, some dick will be offended by something. Your best bet is to jam as much factual unbiased info into it as you can.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:39 am**

Yue_Fei wrote:
Barotix wrote:well said, although whites wont be the majority for long, by 2050 the majority will be hispanics.

Yeah they sure will be, theres only 1.3 billion Chinese guys out there.

Don't forget the indians!

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:39 am**

Reise wrote:I also think no matter how you write a paper about racism, some dick will be offended by something. Your best bet is to jam as much factual unbiased info into it as you can.

Doesn't matter if 'some dick' is offended, what matters is that he doesn't offend his teacher the ones who gives the marks.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:40 am**

Just remember teachers don't grade based on whether they agree or disagree with your opinion (at least they shouldn't), it's how well you prove your opinion that gets you the grade.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:42 am**

redneck wrote:i have to write a paper on racism too!!

Thanks..

AHAHAHAHHAHAHA LOLL

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:42 am**

Ell wrote:Just remember teachers don't grade based on whether they agree or disagree with your opinion (at least they shouldn't), it's how well you prove your opinion that gets you the grade.

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 3:41 am**

Ell wrote:Just remember teachers don't grade based on whether they agree or disagree with your opinion (at least they shouldn't), it's how well you prove your opinion that gets you the grade.

i lol'd at that

Posted: **Sun Oct 28, 2007 10:54 am**

Yue_Fei wrote:
Barotix wrote:well said, although whites wont be the majority for long, by 2050 the majority will be hispanics.

Yeah they sure will be, theres only 1.3 billion Chinese guys out there.

not alot of chinese in the UNITED STATES, i wasnt referring to the world, we all know china pwnzors with thier 1/3rd of the earth. good luck with your essay topic starter

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