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Hello guys, I want everyone's opinion about this piece my little brother wrote. He is 14 years old and is hearing impaired. I am trying to inspire him to write more poetry. I truly believe he has a gift, and plan on putting him on some kind of a paper for the public to see.


Voices Among Me

I stand there concentrating
To the words I hear
But the voices around me
Are upsetting my ear

I feel troubled inside
I feel the need to scream
Distractions around me
Water down a stream

Hysterical inside
I wanted to flee
The man's voice I can't hear
His mouth movement I see

wow nice for a 14 year old, keep inspiring him, I believe he will get better and better

It wasn't bad at all!

The poem is good for a 14 year old.

Your going for the whole deal? As in 15 years we'll see the movie of how a deaf boy became the greatest poet of his time?

Thank you very much for the positve feedback. This will help us more I will post some more poems later.

Nice poem, I can't even do something like that.

Wow nice poem. It has such a smooth flow and I can feel all the anguish in it. WOW tell him great job for me.

Thanks for putting the stuff up, bro. Thanks for the positive comments guys, it's cool that you like my stuff.

wow that was nice